One year, for John's birthday, his dad got him a great gift: tickets and backstage passes to John's favorite band. He could not have been more excited. John bought a T-shirt from the band and listened to all of their music repeatedly in the few weeks leading up to the show. Finally, the day came. He and his dad went early to the venue. Because of their backstage passes, they could get in early and hang around and watch the concert come to be. John was awestruck. At what point, he saw the band members and could not conceal his excitement
"Dad! There they are!" he exclaimed.
"Yeah, I know, just wait until they play," his father replied.
And play they did. They played a long set and John could not have been having more fun. After the show, they went backstage, and they saw the band again. John's dad wanted to go up and meet them, but John was frozen with fear and awe. Finally he managed to walk forward and strike up conversation with the band members. They told him that, with a little practice, he could become as famous as they were. Obviously, they were just trying be nice, but John took those words to heart. At the time, he played the guitar a little, but didn't like it that much.
Through the years, John practiced. He formed a band with a couple of friends, and they were able to climb their way up to the top of the music scene. Still, John lists his favorite childhood band as inspiration. On a wall in his house, he framed and hung up the backstage pass from the concert all those years ago.
Nice connection between the two parts. Think about trying to focus more on showing rather than on telling--an old cliche, I know, but still a valid one. Part II (for example) is mostly summary. It would be stronger if you could use more specific details to show us some of his success. The detail about the framed ticket works nicely; you could use more of that in both parts.
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